Author's Note: In this piece, I really played with the formatting... please comment on how you liked it!
Every.
Time.
Pushed d
o
w
n
l
o
w
e
r
AND
l
o
w
e
r
until I am barely visible
anymore.
The cycle repeats itself.
A setting on a washer,
slowly,
moving
a
d r
n o
u
AND
a
n r
d o
u
until everything inside comes churning
p
u
AND
p
u
Everything that I am is determined by the ruby apple.
That you evil witch try
to use against me.
the
s m
o o
t h
n e
s s
o o
t h
n e
s s
lays undecided,
unworthy,
in my hand.
:D That was amazing! No criticism whatsoever.
ReplyDeleteI loved it :) It was really deep, which I love about all of your pieces. The only thing I would say is that one line "until I am barely visible anymore" was actually "barely visible"...So I don't know if you want it to be that small, I almost skipped it, I'd make it a tad bit bigger..Sorry for nit picking, but yeah...IT WAS AMAZING!! <333
ReplyDeleteThis was really good. I understood how this worked into what you were trying to convey. Amazing work!
ReplyDeleteI really liked the message you conveyed, and the format was really unique. Although, I found that Tien has a very similar formatted piece on her blog... I just thought I should let you know!
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