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“It's a lot easier to be lost than found. It's the reason we're always searching and rarely discovered--so many locks not enough keys.”
-Sarah Dessen

"Happiness doesn't come from doing what you like, but rather, loving what you do."
-Becca & Scott (JC & AC)


Thursday, November 3, 2011

If...

If I had let her  stay, none of this would have ever happened. If had let her stay , I wouldn't be feeling the pain of sorrow and guilt grasping around my heart. If I had let her stay, she would have been living a life of misery and drudgery. My love for her was too strong to watch her living an unbearable life. My love for her came over me like a storm at sea would have crashed on the shore.  My love for her grew and grew like a red rose blossoms in the summer air, until it was unbearable for me. She had to go. She deserved to be living the high life, a world where there is no hatred, a world as magnificent as heaven. Instead she was stuck here, in the exact opposite of worlds. She had to go. A girl as perfect as she was had to go. Someone had to do it. That someone was me.
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15 comments:

  1. AnushaTNovember 3, 2011 at 12:08 PM

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  2. AlexWNovember 3, 2011 at 12:09 PM

    What was her name?

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  3. BenHNovember 3, 2011 at 12:09 PM

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  4. AnushaTNovember 3, 2011 at 12:10 PM

    I love the detail in your prompt. Also, your word choice was good. Nice job!

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  5. MarissaLNovember 3, 2011 at 12:10 PM

    Amazing. Absolutely breathtaking. This is exactly my type of literature, written to perfection. I love it!
    Marissa

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  6. AlexWNovember 3, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    What was her name? Oh by the way it was good plot development.

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  7. ErikaZNovember 3, 2011 at 12:11 PM

    To those of you who are wondering who she is, it is pro's poetry so it doesn't nessacarily have a plot or character.

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  8. BenHNovember 3, 2011 at 12:12 PM

    Lots of adjectives!

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  9. Jeremy C.November 3, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    Are you supposed to be her sister?

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  10. EmmaCNovember 3, 2011 at 12:21 PM

    It kind of sounds like a poem a boy wrote for a girl. Thats just me

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  11. KatieKNovember 3, 2011 at 12:29 PM

    Oh my goodness Erika this was AMAZING!I really liked how many different inturpritations of it I got and how each one of them branched off into another "if" question. LOVE IT![:

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  12. AllisonRNovember 7, 2011 at 12:49 PM

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  13. Mrs. ReaglesNovember 7, 2011 at 9:15 PM

    Your narrator's lovely words almost completely conceal his lethal intent...almost.

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  14. Kavitha BabuMarch 19, 2012 at 9:38 AM

    I love how you ended it so simply, it wrapped up the piece perfectly. And your use of similes was really descriptive and amazing. keep it up:)

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  15. Becca ChadwickOctober 29, 2012 at 8:13 AM

    Wow Erika! This is absolutely amazing! I love how mysterious it is, and how you incorporated great figurative language! Absolutely Fantabulous! Keep up the great work!

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