There is a single ray of sunshine,
That seeps through the gray of clouds.
It swirls down to the earth,
And dances on the moist ground.
God's spotlight,
That sets the stage for me.
As I turn, facing the world,
I let my hair free and kick off my shoes.
I breathe and feel the mud seeping through my toes.
And then,
I dance.
Leaping and twirling through life,
My hair whipping the wind.
My heart beating uncontrollably,
Yet not noticing.
As happiness and hope overcome me.
I felt the elation surge through me,
As I collapsed in a sea of grass.
My golden hair caressing my face,
I smile.
Nice job! This is very happy, see it wasn't that hard! You're really good, and you showed that by writing something out of your genre. Your voice really comes through in this piece. The only thing is do you have a title for this? Otherwise I loved it!
ReplyDeleteI really had trouble recognizing you're specific style of writing, since this is a different approach to a poem (happy not sad). Although, this poem did make me smile, so you accomplished your goal of writing a happy piece. Oh, I also like you're word choice and sentence patterns, it provided a light-hearted feel. In my opinion, I like your emotional pieces better, but it's always nice to switch it up. Don't take this the wrong way.... I love this poem!
ReplyDeleteOoohhh! I feel so happy! I didn't think that I would actually be able to do it. yea this poem doesn't have a title-- I couldn't think of anything!
ReplyDeleteThis is really good. It's surprising how happy it is. it puts that "sunlight" feeling into words. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteYay! That was really good, and happy!
ReplyDeleteAnd uber duber hard to write!
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