Author's Note: This piece was supposed to use one of the lines or story starters off of the board in the Writing Lab, and I chose the line "Why should I care? It's not like he ever did anything for me!" But I never got to that line because I like this piece ending the way it does. Please comment with suggestions!
They walked down the hallway,
hand in hand, love entwined together. The girl turns around, rolling her eyes
with a bored sigh, for all of her friends trailing the couple to see. They stop
in front of the girl’s next class, and he pulls her into passion’s embrace
whispering in her soft, strawberry scented hair “See you at lunch, ok? Love
you…” and to bid farewell, gives the girl a delicate kiss on the cheek. All the
while, the girl mocks the boy behind his back, and the oblivious crowd “oohs”
and “aahs” at the sight of adoration. As he left, his eyes glossed with love,
searched the girl’s eyes for a response, and in return, received a glare telling
him to go. The glare was perceived as a puppy dog’s eyes telling him that she
loved him in return.
He too was brainwashed by the
power of the girl.
I really like this... And I don't think you need to focus on adding the line, because it could throw the whole voice of it off. Even though it is short, it's so realistic. Almost just like our school. Nice job :)
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